Sonic the Hedgehog

The second line makes very little sense and the final line's metaphor is fairly bad. Seems like a grade school rhyming scheme, and the vocabualry is very weak. Look into using more than just metaphors or similes, oxymorons and personification are two things commonly used thst add a lot to poetry.

4/10, needs a lot of revision, sorry. I do look forward to any changes or future work though! :)