Man || Rap Starter / Incomplete || "Enemies" || Feedback??

[i] Just wanted to place this out here, to know how far I am in the rapping portion of career. Some say I'm good, and others tell me otherwise. I'm quite interested in hearing your thoughts. I've both written the lyrics, and attempted to rap it on vocaroo. could have put a mix to it aswell, but went acapella.




Lyrics:
I leave these enemies in Tennessee unable to breathe, till they hesitate and freeze, when I squeeze the glock with ease. I make sure the tech connects to their necks, and leave side affects that'll screw up their diallects.[i]




http://vocaroo.com/i/s17xfUbfGEFI