Sonic the Hedgehog

Sonic the Hedgehog
By: JHS905

He’s the fastest thing alive
And he doesn’t hide in a beehive
He fights his foes with speed
And is the guy to lead
This guy is fast
And never goes last
He’s Sonic the Hedgehog
And moves faster than a moving log

This is a good poem, thanks for sharing with us!

Nice poem, 7/10. Could've been better, but pretty good. Thanks for sharing, as Malevolent said :3

Thank you for the rating.

Not too bad, the last line could be stronger.

There's a few incomplete rhymes in your poem but overall it's a decent one.

This, what you just posted, Is amazing! 9/10 Eh! No 10/10! I hope you post more![/align]

Thanks everyone. The next poem I make will be a decent one.

Thanks everyone. The next poem I make will be a decent one.

Good to hear my fellow. Always remember that practicing makes perfect! You are on your way.

The second line makes very little sense and the final line's metaphor is fairly bad. Seems like a grade school rhyming scheme, and the vocabualry is very weak. Look into using more than just metaphors or similes, oxymorons and personification are two things commonly used thst add a lot to poetry.

4/10, needs a lot of revision, sorry. I do look forward to any changes or future work though! :)