Need some Feedback

Hello, I have started to write a story and would like some feedback, also a vote would be nice.

http://www.wattpad.com/40343263-the-blac...an-fiction

Good attempt. :) keep on writing stories.... :)

waiting for new chapter.

Just reading quickly through, the language is not very descriptive and there are quite a few grammatical errors; I'm almost sure you didn't proof-read.

But continue, I'm a fan of him as well. <3

It is full of grammatical errors, and sorry to say this, but it's quite.... boring.

Grammatical errors, and boring yes.